So I recognize the levels aren't good...

But, I think I'm going to use this as the main shape of my story. My plan from here is to interview my mom, dad and uncle:

I'm wondering if my mom used her wedding as a scheme to get them back together? Reunited and it feels so good?

As far as feedback, in this rough form I'm really trying to ease listeners in to a semi-heavy subject matter with the jokes and anecdotes. I also feel that these give everyone a sense of the characters we're dealing with...

What do you think?

A few Pieces of an Interview

Here are clips from the interview I've logged for my final class piece. The sound quality isn't the best—when I recorded this interview I had a lot less knowledge than I do now.

This is the meat of what I'll be using though, along with some narration that I'm writing (and struggling with) at the moment.

Re-post, with Questions

So I am re-posting my Sonic Haiku. This is my big question: Should I add a voice over narration?

I have been thinking about this for the past few days and have written a few lines and phrases but placed over what I have already, nothing seems to really work or make sense.

I'm not sure if this is clear in the piece in its current state, but in 20 seconds I go through all the steps it takes to make someone's sandwhich order. It starts with the man asking "bout how long before that'll be out" and then ends with "order for Jack". I feel like I'm already telling a story, but this might not be clear for various reasons.

I'd appreciate any thoughts on this matter.

Sonic Haiku-zing

This is the first, very rough draft of my sonic haiku. Do you recognize the space? Do I need some voice over help? Should I re-mix and re-mix again?