This is my work in progress for the On the Road journey. I started out with the first post, something more formal. Then, this weekend I started recording sounds from the Wine and Cheese Party that my house has each semester. Inspired by that, I cut together sounds from the party with Kelikee's story, ultimately trying to mix the chaos of the house with her coherent narrative on a grey hound trip. I'm not really satisfied where I am with the project at this point, and might decide to go in a different direction entirely, but here's where I am at the moment!
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I confess, I preferred hearing the whole piece of Kelikee's trip over the small snippets inserted into the tangent tale. Her story felt more cohesive on its own, albeit needing a cutdown in some places for time sake. Don't get me wrong, the sounds from the Wine and Cheese Party are good listening, but might be of more use in a different and more directly related piece. If, however, there is a legitimate argument for why the party was intermingled I might change my mind. As of now, I'd advise to stick to her story and find different sounds to add in. Cheers to more recording! *chink of wine glasses*
ReplyDelete(i've totally taken the greyhound to/from cleveland to ann arbor. met a drug dealer who told me about UFO's and prostitutes...good times.)
ReplyDeletei agree with the above comment.the other sounds don't contribute much to the actual story, and kind of take away from the cohesiveness of the piece.
I think that you have an interesting idea going on here, but I do not think that you executed it how you wanted. I really like the idea of integrating sounds with fragments of the story, but you need to find a way to make it flow more cohesively in a way that allows the story to continue uninterrupted. use sounds that really emphasize the story.
ReplyDeleteOverall I think that the sounds from the party distracted me from the story. You have the right idea about adding sounds into the piece to make it more interesting, I'm just not sure you picked the right ones or the right amounts. To bring the listener in it would be best to use a sound that more directly relates and connects the audience to the story being told in order to strengthen the piece as a unit. It seems that your creativity and willingness to experiment will be interesting to follow as your work continues to grow.
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