Okey Dokie, Another Draft and a FInal go tomorrow

I'm actually quite happy with this, but fresh eyes will give me more insight :)

Another draft of my final

Today I spent a lot of time fixing the audio on this piece. Mainly I played with noise reduction and audio repair in Soundtrack Pro, re-recorded my voice over, and attempted to fix my mom's levels in her interview.

I also further edited the piece for cohesion and improved narrative qualities. Hopefully the difference is clear! But maybe not, which is always why I love feedback.

No new sound....

But... the Repair audio tutorials on Lynda.com just changed my life! It's so nice to hear Nonno and have it sound like he's in the room with me right now.

So of course, nothing is ever really finished...

But you know... I'm trying

Another Final Addition

Hey blog readers,

I could really use your help! So, I'm sifting through hours and hours of material here, and this is what I've condensed down to so far. I think I might need to add a little bit of narrative to make the whole thing more cohesive. I also think that I may need to edit and shorten— Is this really boring anywhere? What should I change.

Needing a positive push— S

New Posting of my Final Piece

So, here is the latest version of my final project. I'm looking for any feedback you think could help me out as I continue working on this. I'm about to interview 4 people about this particular event, so I imagine things will change quite drastically in the near future but I'd still love your insight. What's working? What's really not working?

Thank you,

Steph

A New Haiku

Hey everyone,

I have a new haiku, and I like the subject quite a bit so I'm excited to continue working on it. The sound space is Detroit's Eastern Market.

I think I'm going to put in a little narration but I'm not sure what I want to say yet. Eastern Market is a really special space for me. From the time I was 15 until I left for college my mom and I went there every Saturday to buy fruits and vegetables.

It was the first place that I really realized where food came from, and because of Eastern Market I eventually stopped eating meat. Anyway, here is the clip below. I think it needs a lot of work and finesse, but here's to beginnings!

So I recognize the levels aren't good...

But, I think I'm going to use this as the main shape of my story. My plan from here is to interview my mom, dad and uncle:

I'm wondering if my mom used her wedding as a scheme to get them back together? Reunited and it feels so good?

As far as feedback, in this rough form I'm really trying to ease listeners in to a semi-heavy subject matter with the jokes and anecdotes. I also feel that these give everyone a sense of the characters we're dealing with...

What do you think?

A few Pieces of an Interview

Here are clips from the interview I've logged for my final class piece. The sound quality isn't the best—when I recorded this interview I had a lot less knowledge than I do now.

This is the meat of what I'll be using though, along with some narration that I'm writing (and struggling with) at the moment.

Re-post, with Questions

So I am re-posting my Sonic Haiku. This is my big question: Should I add a voice over narration?

I have been thinking about this for the past few days and have written a few lines and phrases but placed over what I have already, nothing seems to really work or make sense.

I'm not sure if this is clear in the piece in its current state, but in 20 seconds I go through all the steps it takes to make someone's sandwhich order. It starts with the man asking "bout how long before that'll be out" and then ends with "order for Jack". I feel like I'm already telling a story, but this might not be clear for various reasons.

I'd appreciate any thoughts on this matter.

Sonic Haiku-zing

This is the first, very rough draft of my sonic haiku. Do you recognize the space? Do I need some voice over help? Should I re-mix and re-mix again?

Or this... Sorry, the track has to be downloaded

Hey everyone, I'm embedding a piece that I recorded last October and have been careful not to use as of yet. The sound quality isn't the best (it was recorded before I knew some of the basic principles that I have learned in class).

The piece itself is of my Nonno telling a story about purchasing roses for my Nonna, and how that went awry. I've added some music into the track. Let me know if you have any thoughts, comments, questions, etc.

http://www.divshare.com/download/10576057-d6d

Maybe this is my audio portrait?

Hey everyone, I'm embedding a piece that I recorded last October and have been careful not to use as of yet. The sound quality isn't the best (it was recorded before I knew some of the basic principles that I have learned in class).

The piece itself is of my Nonno telling a story about purchasing roses for my Nonna, and how that went awry. I've added some music into the track. Let me know if you have any thoughts, comments, questions, etc.

http://www.divshare.com/download/10576057-d6d

Null and Void

Hate to show embarrassing, Italian-Catholic-hillbilly superstitions on my blog, but post 17 has to remain audio free.

Finally, a Final Draft of a Poem about Sandwich Tests!

After multiple edits with multiple endings the "Choose your own Adventure" aspect of this project comes to an end. This is my final piece.

Another List, Just for Fun

My birthday party was yesterday, I made a list poem about it when I woke up. This is just a bonus, B-side list, but it's fun.

Am I married to this one?

Here is yet another draft of the list poem. I've made a lot of changes since draft one, but I'm still working on getting my voice up to par as far as performance/making it interesting goes.

I had a lot of fun playing with the idea of "word music" and repetition, but ended up taking out a lot of the word loops I made. Enjoy!

Another Draft with all the sounds

In Progress, but getting there: The Test

Here is the latest version of my list poem. I've experimented with several versions and layers of sound and thus far this has been the most enjoyable to me.

BUT, I have a few questions: Does the music acting as a bed underneath the vocals work for the piece? Am I clear enough on the vocals? Is anything distracting or taking away from the piece overall? Any thoughts or comments are welcome!

Just kidding: The last one didn't upload

So here is my list again, because Divshare was doing something weird before. But the comments/story behind the list are still valid from the last post, and I'd still like comments.