Another Final Addition

Hey blog readers,

I could really use your help! So, I'm sifting through hours and hours of material here, and this is what I've condensed down to so far. I think I might need to add a little bit of narrative to make the whole thing more cohesive. I also think that I may need to edit and shorten— Is this really boring anywhere? What should I change.

Needing a positive push— S

New Posting of my Final Piece

So, here is the latest version of my final project. I'm looking for any feedback you think could help me out as I continue working on this. I'm about to interview 4 people about this particular event, so I imagine things will change quite drastically in the near future but I'd still love your insight. What's working? What's really not working?

Thank you,

Steph

A New Haiku

Hey everyone,

I have a new haiku, and I like the subject quite a bit so I'm excited to continue working on it. The sound space is Detroit's Eastern Market.

I think I'm going to put in a little narration but I'm not sure what I want to say yet. Eastern Market is a really special space for me. From the time I was 15 until I left for college my mom and I went there every Saturday to buy fruits and vegetables.

It was the first place that I really realized where food came from, and because of Eastern Market I eventually stopped eating meat. Anyway, here is the clip below. I think it needs a lot of work and finesse, but here's to beginnings!

So I recognize the levels aren't good...

But, I think I'm going to use this as the main shape of my story. My plan from here is to interview my mom, dad and uncle:

I'm wondering if my mom used her wedding as a scheme to get them back together? Reunited and it feels so good?

As far as feedback, in this rough form I'm really trying to ease listeners in to a semi-heavy subject matter with the jokes and anecdotes. I also feel that these give everyone a sense of the characters we're dealing with...

What do you think?

A few Pieces of an Interview

Here are clips from the interview I've logged for my final class piece. The sound quality isn't the best—when I recorded this interview I had a lot less knowledge than I do now.

This is the meat of what I'll be using though, along with some narration that I'm writing (and struggling with) at the moment.

Re-post, with Questions

So I am re-posting my Sonic Haiku. This is my big question: Should I add a voice over narration?

I have been thinking about this for the past few days and have written a few lines and phrases but placed over what I have already, nothing seems to really work or make sense.

I'm not sure if this is clear in the piece in its current state, but in 20 seconds I go through all the steps it takes to make someone's sandwhich order. It starts with the man asking "bout how long before that'll be out" and then ends with "order for Jack". I feel like I'm already telling a story, but this might not be clear for various reasons.

I'd appreciate any thoughts on this matter.

Sonic Haiku-zing

This is the first, very rough draft of my sonic haiku. Do you recognize the space? Do I need some voice over help? Should I re-mix and re-mix again?